Short Stories

[Voodoo]

Sorry guys I was REALLY lazy about this particular discussion. Anyway I was going to show a different short story that I had written but I got extremely lazy. So here is a short story that I originally wrote as a blog titled 'Verner.'

"What's so important to her? What are her inner thoughts that she hides-even from me!" Verner says from a normal tone to a shrieking yell. He only said it in the confides of his mind, yet his soul is rattled by chaotic feelings.

Verner's body froze in place and he could tell his eyes were starting to take his mind somewhere distant. An old woman's voice commanded Verner to lie down. In this transitioning of his soul, Verner was confused by the command.

"Wha-Where am I? Where is the rest of me," Verner says to the voice. Verner notices that the teacher is talking. Verner takes in a deep breath-in and out-and then tries to listen. Every sound the teacher makes enters his brain. However, Verner understands what the teacher is saying about as well as two people can hear each other on the opposite edges of a hurricane.

"It's...so hard to think. There is this pressure...why is there this pressure...? The pressure...my feelings-thoughts...have to be intense...to fight-" he says in his head.

"At least SIT DOWN Verner!" the old croon in his head bitingly commands.

Verner's physical being and what's left that attaches his soul to his body sits down. What remains of him is unable to respond because it is inept to think, feel or process his thoughts and feelings-or at least it almost is.

Perhaps a better way of describing what Verner is experiencing is that he is experiencing 'shock of the inner mind'. Part of him was extremely curious about his girlfriend's inner thoughts, but another part was so scared of Verner being disappointed by what the other part of him would think of that it ran in front of the curious part of him. The scared part protected his feelings and thoughts from possible humiliation. But the scared part protects only in fear that the already tender feelings will be hurt more. All that remains of Verner's feelings are sadness and loneliness. He is sad because he can't help but worry about what others would think about him if he were to let the intense feelings out. There is loneliness because it feels like a part of him is missing and because his friends seem far away.

"Rena we've been going out for years! Why does it still seem like you're hiding something from me," Verner yells at an empty place that seems very distant from the rest of himself.

Verner anticipated his angry tantrums at the silence that would answer him back.

"Why do I still feel distant from you even though I've been trying to get to know you for so long," Rena voice screamed.

"Rena. We've both been so far away from ourselves, because we're afraid of what others will think..."

"We can't be afraid of what others think when we're so far away from ourselves."

"No. We shouldn't be afraid of what others think-we should be ourselves around others. We won't abandon or ridecule each other as long as we be ourselves."

End

[Riri]

Voodoo,
Do you publish your stories? Mine are mostly half-done, only two of them are finished but waiting to be refined. I think this one is publishable, but may need to be more elaborated.